grammar - BBC: "Man convicted of murdering his girlfriend and their 10-month-old daughter at Winchester Crown Court"
What do you make of the following BBC News headline:
Man convicted of murdering his girlfriend and their 10-month-old daughter at Winchester Crown Court
Is it just me, or does this read as if the murders were committed at the court?
Answer
Yes. The meaning is understood, but a decent editor would have dropped the place reference from the headline. It adds nothing and introduces ambiguity.
To recast the sentence for clarity, I would suggest:
Man convicted at Winchester Crown Court of murdering his girlfriend and their 10-month-old daughter
That puts the money words ("murdering" "girlfriend" "daughter") at too far a remove from the beginning of the headline, however, so it is easy to see why the editor chose to put the place reference at the end. As I say, however, this information seems to belong more in body copy than in a headline.
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